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Weather in my town changeable. The best time of year in Moscow - spring.
Flowers bloom, the grass turns green, the sun comes in the sky. The weather is warm and sunny. In my town you can visit many interesting places. When the snow melted, the park rides open. We can look at the beautiful views. In late spring you can swim in the river. I love my city at any time of year, but it is especially beautiful in spring. Come to me in the spring!

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Weather is changeable in my city. The best time of year in Moscow - spring.Flowers bloom, the grass turns green, the sun comes in the sky. The weather is warm and sunny. In my city you can visit many interesting places. When the snow melts, the park rides open. Then we can see beautiful views. In late spring you can swim in the river. I love my city at any time of year, but it is especially beautiful in spring. Come and see me in the spring!