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My Family
My family for me is my fortress! My family is most important to me!
In my family, I feel warm and cozy, because I’m surrounded by people dear for me: my mother ,father ,older brother , still living with us our beloved cat.
My mom is of medium height, she has got short dark hair, mammy likes to collect hair a ponytails. She has got expressive green eyes ,tender hands , has the most sincere smile and gentle voice. She dresses stylishly. I very much love my mother, she is the most expensive for me person on the ground ! Mom is also my best friend.
I admire my father for his strong characters. My father medium height .He is full. He has got strong black hair ,gray eyes ,strong hands and serious look. My dad is the best ! With any problems I turn to him ,he understands me and helps.
My brother is older than me for twelve years. He was always close and looked after me. Addition , he is the most fun in our family. He has got blonde hair and green eyes . Hi is tall. Next to him , I feel protected .
My cat is very fat and kind. He has got orange eyes ,gray wool and long ears. his legs are small and with large claws. Most of all my cat likes to sleep.
As for me, I have got blue eyes ,brown short hair, pale face and I have high forehead. I am of average height . I can not imagine myself without my family because they are my everything ! My family is my happiness.

My FamilyMy family is my fortress for me! My family is the most important thing to me!In my family, I feel warm and cozy, because I’m surrounded by people who are really dear for me: my mother, my father, my older brother, our beloved cat lives with us.My mom is a woman  of medium height, she has got short dark hair, mammy likes to make hair ponytails. She has got expressive green eyes ,tender hands , and amazing smile and gentle voice. She dresses stylishly. I love my mother very much, she is the most important person in the world! Mom is also my best friend.I admire my father for his strong character. My father is a man of medium height .He is a stout man. He has got strong black hair ,grey eyes ,strong hands and serious look. My dad is the best !  I turn to him with any problems,he understands me and always helps.My brother is older than me by twelve years. He was always close and looked after me. Besides, he is the funniest member in our family. He has got blonde hair and green eyes . He is tall. Thanks to him , I feel protected .My cat is very fat and kind. He has got orange eyes ,grey wool and long ears. His legs are small with large claws. Most of all my cat likes to sleep.As for me, I have got blue eyes ,brown short hair, pale face and I have a high forehead. I am a man of average height . I can not imagine myself without my family because they are my everything ! My family is my happiness.